Significant events in texts and the impact they have on readers often help to clarify the general vision & viewpoint of those texts.
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General vision & viewpoint refers to the view of the world of the world offered by the author, as well as the view the reader obtains from studying the text. The vision portrayed in dramatic ‘Big Maggie’ by John B.Keane, surprising (L) Silas Marner’ by George Elliot and brilliant ‘Brooklyn’ directed by John Crowley, I believe all offer different yet thought provoking views of the world. (L) While for the most part (L) I share the view offered by the author, on occasion I find myself uncovering new opinions and views of the world portrayed different (L, awkward syntax.) to what the author intended it to be. In all three texts (L) the authors (L) use of significant events to depict the General Vision and Viewpoint, (L) greatly impacts how the reader experiences the text and influences the audience and I to have certain views of the world portrayed. The General Vision and Viewpoint at these momentous occasions throughout the texts helps me personally understand the authors own thoughts and vision they wished to bestow on me as a reader. (Introduction needs to be pared back, be more succinct.)
‘Big Maggie’ is saturated with pessimistic and melancholy outlooks (awkward expression, “conveys a pessimistic outlook”) similar to ‘Brooklyn’ and ‘Silas Marner’. The key scene that reminds us of this in ‘Brooklyn’ (Why have you jumped to Brooklyn, the opening sentence highlights Big Maggie, should this not be dealt with first?) is the heartbreaking hopeful medium shot between Father Flod (M) and Eilis when, he shows her how choosing what is best can be sad and lonely at the time, along the same lines in ‘Big Maggie’ losing her husband is what’s best for her and when she destroys her family, by individually cutting each one of, just so her kids can be happy because she knows they’ll ‘get over it’ causing Maggie to be ‘alone now’, in order for what’s best. (This section needs to be clearer. The KM in Brooklyn, be more specific, explain what you learn about GV&V. Again in Big Maggie, which KM are you referring to? It is vague and needs more textual support.) What the texts share is the genuine warmth and kindness in their isolation. Rose’s sadness that Eilis is gone, in the close up shot of her grasping onto her letter, and Maggie’s brutal demolishing of her children’s relationships as ‘they won’t live the life I lived’. (Sentence seems unfinished…) I believe creating a harsh viewpoint on life but leading to a hopeful outlook for the future. (Explain how. This is a statement that needs to be developed.) We also see in ‘Silas Marner’ the ‘drawing of lots’ is a pivotal key moment, as it changes Silas and frees him from the controlling constricting religious codes, as(L)‘Religion was the heart of Lantern Yard’, while the author’s vision of the world is overall quite bleak, I obtain a positive view of this key moment, as the elimination of the restricting and demanding Church creates in my eyes as (L, awkward expression.) more free, prosperous and happy outlook, albeit it may be sad and lonely it’s what is best. (L) Personally (L) I think these key scenes convey that struggles, separation and sadness will be overcome and be rewarded for their (Who will be rewarded?) hardships, a positive and optimistic outlook in all texts for Eilis, Silis(M) and Maggie’s kids, impacting the audience to understand that “Everything comes to light’ no matter what the journey. (Your points need more detail and development. The exploration of key moments is quite fleeting and you are not using the text in enough detail.)
As the texts progress, so does the general vision and viewpoint of each. A significant event in ‘Silas Marner’ is the ‘finding his treasure again’ being Eppie (L).This is an extremely significant moment, as Eppie’s arrival into Silas (L)lonely, isolated and depressing world changes the whole outlook, as he ‘might be seen in the sunny mid- day, or in the late afternoon’ which was never like him before,(L) I believe this stunning superb pathetic fallacy truly reveals how happy people can be when they meet someone. Along the same lines in ‘Brooklyn’ as America has ‘changed’ Eilis she’s ‘happy now’ because she’s met Tony the love of her life ,just like Silas.(L)The author’s outlook has changed dramatically on life impacting the audience severely causing (L awkward expression, severely is unnecessary) us to share the same burning bright joy Eilis and Silas now projects. (L)In a very different way the same is seen in ‘Big Maggie’ although the author’s outlook for the protagonist is quite secluded and lonely, I perceive its(L) what’s best for her as she’s wants to be alone, she needs time to be ‘free’ and ‘have anything I want’ as she’s spent to long being suffocating by the world. I believe(M) just because she’s alone don’t (doesn’t) mean she can’t be happy,enaging the audience to reader more into the mind of the author. (This needs to be developed.)
In ‘Brooklyn’ Rose’s tragic, tearful and heartbreaking death completely changes the film’s outlooking,changing from a happy, bright and hopeful viewpoint to one I believe now focused on death and sadness, making(L) is a truly important key scene, as not only does it impact Eilis but myself as well helping clarify the authors vision. (A long sentence. What is the key scene/use the text. How does it impact Eilis? How does it impact you?) Along the same lines (too informal) in ‘Silas Marner’ the sorrowful key moment with the death of Silas childlike coins ‘that he drew them out to enjoy their companionship’ breaks his fragile weak heart, just as in ‘Brooklyn’. In my opinion, we truly are revealed the heartbreak, in the traumatic, tearful and tragic close up shot of Eilis clinging onto the death teller telephone, openly projecting out the negative sad outlook now. (Reread sentence, jumps from Eilis to Silas to Eilis. Control the content.) Similarly in ‘Silas Marner’ with the perfectly poignant pathetic fallacy significant event (L, control of sentence.), when we see both the protagonist and nature convey, what I believe to be a genuinely heartbreaking, dejected and depressing outlook, ‘as he opened it the rain beat in upon him, for it was falling more and more heavily ’(L) Both key scenes are reminiscent of pain, tragic and moving times, which deeply impacted me with its agonizing deathly vision, evoking a great deal of sorrow and sympathy from me. (This needs to be specific. It is too general.)
All texts, express the same deeply flawed family relationships and the negative uncomfortable outlooks emerging from it. (Reread the sentence. Edit.) In ‘Brooklyn’ Eilis and her mother care about each other, but cannot talk or communicate properly, which I think this key scene completely darkness the films viewpoint.(L) We also see in ‘Silas Marner’ Godferys (M)(L) moral compass shattered by his selfishness and ‘coward’ ways to reveal the truth about his child. The scene that mirrors ‘Brooklyn’ and instantly creates a pessimistic outlook, as I fail to see any sort of loving bond forming. (Which scene? Use the text.) Likewise in ‘Big Maggie’ we are shown the failing family bond again, as(L)Maggie’s fails to repair the damage because she refuses to ‘hand over the reigns’ the author expresses a quite sad and despondent outlook. This impacted me deeply and provoked me to embrace and helped clarify this negative attitude and hope for a better and happier vision in the end. (How did this create the feeling? Don’t make statements – prove them.)
As the texts draw to a close, my view of each of the three worlds is decided. The most prominent event at the end of ‘Big Maggie’ is her monumental memorable monologue where she confess her pain over all these years and expresses her undeniable delights that she’s‘alone now’ and ‘can have anything’ she wants without having her life ‘dominated by a musty old man in a roman collar’, which pours out a cheerful and happy outlook. Just as in ‘Silas Marner’ where his life comes to a joyful finish watching ‘his treasure’ Eppie get married and still remains by his side closer than ever. I find this quite baffling beautiful(L) to see that all this pain and suffering paid off in both texts as they really are both truly and most definitely are elated at the end. These key moments echoes that in ‘Brooklyn’ which the stunning medium shot of Eilis and Tony in one another’s embrace. I think really conveying that these hardships really do come around ‘that one day the sun will come out’ ,which to me is magnificently memorable, as it perfectly conveys that hard times will always be overthrown by the power of happiness. Personally in my opinion perfectly underscores all three texts exquisitely, whilst projecting out undying joy. (Good paragraph, clear use of key moments.)
In conclusion,I firmly believe that these tremendous three texts (L)significant events have a profound effect on the readerand(L) help us to understand the general vision and viewpoint of the authors. It is quite evident that these texts are enriched with dynamic overwhelming painful yet beautiful viewpoints. Although they may be dominated with pessimistic and negative views at times it is the undying hope of eternal happiness that overpowers the darkness. I believe truly expressing the reality of life and impacting us greatly helping us understand the author’s general vision and viewpoint.
You have lots of opinions on the GV&V and you make good connections between the texts. A clear effort is made to answer the question. Your use of the texts needs to be more detailed. Points need to be clearer. Your paragraph on the conclusions of each text is very good, it is clear, focused and uses key moments well. Try to structure the other paragraphs like this. Proof read all your sentences. Control your expression, it can get overenthusiastic at times.
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